When i woke up i was in the house and there were lights everywhere, i could hear distant sirens and then I looked up and my vision got clearer and there was someone standin over me.
"Can you hear me,".
I felt like i was swimmin, i slowly turned my head and i saw Ryans dad lyin on his back covered in blood. I started cryin and then i heard someone say, "shes alive,".
I dont remember what happened next, i jus remember bare lights and me swimmin and then bein lifted up and me not bein able to move my head.
All i could hear were faint voices and like i felt that i was half asleep.
I just remember a tear rollin down my left eye.
Then i remember bein in a bed and then fallin asleep.
"Deena," I woke up.
There was a doctor standin next to me, "Deena how do you feel."
My entire body was in pain.
"Deena, my name is Dr.Cox, I operated on you yesterday,"
"Operated?".
"You were shot Deena- we were able to remove the bullet but-"
I started cryin, "I was shot?".
"Deena, the police want to talk you, did you see who shot you," he asked.
I cried and just cried, "what about-"
"The man in the house was also shot- he's in a stable condition- Deena did u see who shot u,"
I cried.
"No," i said.
"Deena someone's here to see you," he said.
I cried.
The Dr left the room.
Rochelle walked in and sat next to the bed.
I looked at her and cried, she stroked my face with the back of her hand, i couldnt even say anyfin.
"Dr Cox told u what happened to you yeah?", she asked.
I cried.
"Deena who did this," she asked.
"I dont know," i sobbed, "i didnt see anythin,"
My legs were in a cast.
"Why are my legs in a cast," i asked.
She looked and said, "Deena- they dont know if ull walk again."
I turned my head and started sobbin.
I just cried, she kept sayin "its gonna be ok, its gonna be ok,"
"They might need to perform an operation on you-" she said, "and you might lose a lot of blood and so they've found someone with your blood type just in case you need blood."
"Get out," i said. I couldnt feel anythin in my legs. They were jus numb.
"Why are u even here," i screamd, "u hate me!".
"I dont hate u Deena- im here to help u," she said.
"I dontneed ur help- I just need ryan," i said cryin, i sobbed so hard.
"Deena," she said, "You might not walk again and you need to understand that no matter what happens to you you need to be strong,you need to carry on tough ok,"
"Get out!", i screamed.
"NO!", she shouted back, "im not leavin u here like this."
I looked at her and started cryin, i felt empty and lost.
"Deena, the feds are gonna come in here and talk 2 u about protection," she said.
"protection," i said tryin my best not to cry when i realized that i felt absolutely nothin in my leg.
"Whoever tried to shoot u might try again," she said.
"Who- who shot me Rochelle?", i wept, she hugged me and i wept so hard i felt like my insides were gonna fall out of my eyes, uno them hard cries like where ur whole body shakes.
"Deena, im gonna go see Dr.Cox about gettin in contact with your nan ok, ill be righ back," she said.
Then she left.
And when i was alone, for the first time in my life I prayed and i prayed that If God would give me another chance, I would change and do better and that i would- i started cryin as i closed my eyes to finish my prayer, then someone came in and closed the door.
I looked up.
They locked the door and looked at me, we were look at each other.
And then i knew it, "You did dis, you shot me, how did u get out! how did u get here, how the fuck did u get out."
They looked fumin. Then they pulled out a strap.
"Im doin this for Ryan."
"Please no," i cried.
"Scream and ill shoot straight away," they said.
"Why would u do dis," i cried, "why would u shoot me."
They didnt say anythin and then held the gun up and said, "I saw our mum today for the first time,"
And then I knew it.
"No no," i said, "nah nah it aint- it aint u- it cant be u- u cant be-"
"That's right Deena, the baby in the picture was me."
"YOU FUCKIN BASTARD!", I screamed.
Then he aimed at me and pulled the trigger.
"That's Olefumi to you."
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tHIS ENDING couldnt have been anymore better. OH SHIT WAIT- why did it say he? IS DEENAS SISTER REALLY A BROTHER?
ReplyDeleteFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUMEZ IS HER BROTHER! AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAJAAJAJAJAJAHAHJDUDUHGHGSUHDSNBNXZUUUHUUHHUUUIUIUUIIIBOOUO9999999UOU9HUU9UHHUU
ReplyDeleteu can't end it here
ReplyDeleteplz dont end it here
im crying.
ReplyDeletei never want this to end.
ok ok ok, its too early in the mornin for this, let me go tomy exam come back and collect my thoughts so i can really say how i feel cos at this point im too exicted to make any sense.
ReplyDeleteFUCK OFF!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteFUMEZ WOZ HER BROTHER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
So y did dey dress him in girls clothin 4 lol. Dats crazy. I aint enjoyd a story lyk dat in sooooo long. Dis woz gooooooooood! U need 2 hurry up and make money off of dis. I wud b da 1st @ da cinemas w8n 2 watch dis. Dis woz liiiive. Loved it.
*STANDS UP AND GIVES A ROUND OF APPLAUSE!!!!*
i swear fumez is in jail how can it end like that.... what about sorcha what happened to her and adam... and deena's mum.. and i thought the baby was a girl.. allow fumes killing deena thats just pissed me off... and sorcha's still breathing...
ReplyDeleteWaiittttt Imm Soo Lost Now..Who Was Olefumii Agaiin?? Helppp
ReplyDeleteyou know you cant even end it like that right.
ReplyDeletethat is straight wrong but how is fumez or oluwahwah gonna be fuckin his sister?ewwwwwwwwwwww . . . I mean really like das deeply wrong on sooooooooo many levels.. . .
but 4 real do whenz the next chapter.
No wayy
ReplyDeleteyou cant end it like this
huh fumez?
wtf
thats dutty fucking her brother
eurgh man
and how can she be telling this story is she's dead
she cant be dead.
Rahhh fam this is bare emosh
aww nooo noo you cant end deena. this has bee my life since ja nuary
ahh man tings are not lookin so good.
i thought natalie and her was gonna make up
aw mann
i really dunno how i feel about this...
ReplyDelete:O.. eewww.. she fuked fumez and.. and.. HES HER BROTHER!!! hahahaha....
ReplyDeleteOMG FUMEZ! OMG INCEST! OMDz WOOOOOOW WAIT A MINUTE WOI, THIS CANT END HERE...WAIT A MINUTE HOW CAN DEANA BE TELLING THE STORY IF SHES DEAD, HE MUST AV MISSED RIGHT? THIS IS TOO MUCH....I NEED MOOOORE, THIS CANT BE THE END ;D...can it? lol
ReplyDeleteGod daaammmnnnn!!! That last line killed me coz i knew it was comin!!
ReplyDeleteLOL! From the priest said it was an african name i KNEW it was FUMEZ!! LOL....I fuckin luv it, luv it, luv it!!
U got me makin up noise this early at work!...Author, I gotta say, Youre GOOD! DAMN GOOD!
Love the way I got up this morning to THREE chapters to devour....delicious! But U know this cant really be 'The End' now innit??...Need MORRREEE!!!!
Like the last comment, I gotta collect my thoughts and come back to this....Jokes!
Nooooo I'm Upset... But Yea Yuu Got Me Woowww... So Whats's Next...
ReplyDeleteomfg.... please NO PLEASE NO, NO, NO, NO you cant end it like this you just cant... no no, one more chapter just one
ReplyDeleteamazing chapter totaly genius I would have never expected fumez to be her bro at all wow such great talented writer well done.
ReplyDeletewhat am I gonna do now with out deena in my life, is another sket story coming out???
Shiiiiiitttt...
ReplyDeleteIt Was Fumez... That Unexpected...
I Wanna Know What happens Next...
who shot deena
ReplyDeletewho's her bruva
Na u cnt end it here
aaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
Is Olefumi Fumez?
ReplyDeletewait who killed her im so bafd =[
ReplyDeletewait hu killd her :S
ReplyDeleteyou cant end it here!!! please no!! fumez is her brother!?!?! she fucked him!!! ok one more to clarify everything please
ReplyDeletenooooo :(
ReplyDeleteOhh mu gosh that's mad !! I hope she aint actually dead arghhh fumez I can't believe it don't stoppp plsssssssssss !!!! We need more
ReplyDeleteCan't believe its over!! so basically deena's fucked her brother as well as her uncle.
ReplyDeleteDeena aint dead, he mustve missed, what i like is how uncliche this is, thin about it, if Sorcha had been killed it would have been too predictable and fumez mustve been a pretty baby bu why was he dressed in girls clothin, and deena fuckin ryans dad an him beatin her up after- hmm where does that sound familiar?
ReplyDeletethis needs to go world wide!!!!... Toooo Amazing!!!!
ReplyDeleteooooh... was Fumez Born A Chick???..... Then Changed Himself?... Too Bad its Fini... :(
ReplyDeleteOMGOMG IT CANT END THERES GOTTA BE A PART TWOO!
ReplyDeleteDONT LEAVE IT LIKE THATTTTT
OMG KMTTT WHERES FUMEZ?
OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG HOW COULD IT END IM IN TEARS MAN SHE CANT DIE SHE PRAYED FOR ANOTHER CHANCE. AND DAT Olefumi IS A DUTTY STINKIN RASS HOW DID HE KNOW RYAN TO DO SHOOT DEENA FOR HIM :@
ReplyDeleteSAKIRA X
the endin was good; workin it out was fun, really felt like ive been part of this story... if this was the last chapter, i dont understand how she could be explaining what he sais if shes just been dead and be supposedly dead?
ReplyDeletecant believe this story is over man !
the writer of this is 2 deep and needs to and will go far with their writing talent x
Nooooooooo!! Dont Finish Ittt Thereeee We Want MOREEEEE! This Is TOOOOO Good Put Moree Up Pleaseeee Keep Them Cumming :D
ReplyDeleteyou cant leave the story like this the story is deep and you are leaving it like this
ReplyDeleteNAAAR come on more please!
Deena has beat her brother and her uncle - dirt
ReplyDeleteFumes has beat his sister and has sucked off her man -dirt
Come like hillbillys, beatin out the fam
Yikes *bb sick face*
to be fair this all started with Fumez - he raped natalie....he then did the line with deena and introduced her to ryan etc
ReplyDeleteOMFG weldun....fumez is her bro madness cumon man 1 more chapter plz i cn believe it over
ReplyDeleteOMFGGGGGG!! i cant beleive this
ReplyDeletewoww this was tooooo much for me
fumz? and deena? brother and sister?
loveed the ending! im gunna miss this story
great way to finish.
nh im sorry i luv this story buh tht ending is kinda wack yu cant end it lyk dah we need answers to all these questions yuve opened up yu av to atleast carry this on or start anuva story lyk frm chanel i'd luv to knw bout her life or natalie wud b even beta lyk on a real Deena can't b dead man i wantd her n natalie to make up n all the stuff bout her results n tht nah mn it cnt b ova lol saink else has to start or this has to carry on yu cud b makin serious money frm this thoe yur a gd writter <3
ReplyDeleteOMG FUMEZ IS HERR BROTHER !
ReplyDeleteWowwwwww what a read this has been good I didn't want it to end though well done to the author I'll be recommending this story
ReplyDeletei rar need more, been hooked on dese last few chapters, sum1 needs to do summat like a family tree linking everyone up
ReplyDeletefumez...? but i swear she fucked him...??? no way can it end like this!!!!!
ReplyDeleteFUMEZ WAS HER BROTHER OMG
ReplyDeleteDEENA WAS THE DUMBEST BIGGEST SKET ALIVE..AND NOW SHES DEAD.
I WISH THIS NEVER ENDED THO, BUT IT WAS THE ONLY WAY U CUD REALLY END IT
AMAZING STORY!! WELL DONE!! U GOT A REAL TALENT!!
AMAZING is all i can saY F U C K I N G AMAZING,
ReplyDeleteLOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT
NOOOOOOOOOOO....I cant believe it...Although she was nasty i really liked deena...And fumez nahhhhh
ReplyDeleteOMG...PLZZZ.WE NEED MORE CHAPTERS
ReplyDeletedid she not bang fumez though??? she sh*gged her bro and her uncle?????????????
ReplyDeleteLoved this blog from beginning to end....it's had me kissing my teeth, laughing and gasping out loud in public :0)Checking out ASOS and more importantly it's made me think about the plight of our community and what we need to do to change the destructive path that seems so appealing to so many youths.
ReplyDeleteTo the author well done....keep up the good work I hope we get the chance to read more of your work. Hope your looking at publishing or self publishing cause you need to get paid for what you do :0)
p.s: love the fact that your consistent with posting your works.....too many authors start posting blogs get you hooked then start posting weeks, sometime months apart or just stop posting with no warning or apology.
ReplyDeleteYhu Dnt Kno If She Died Or Not all It Sed Wasz Dat She Got Shot It Nevahh Sed She Died And Plus Wen U Styl Get Shot U Can Hear - Duuh !
ReplyDeleteJust Had To Clear That Up!
why does fumez hate deena again tho? enuff to kill her..? what did he go to pen for.. tryna stab natalie or summin..? ive forgotten sum stuff so it hasnt has as much of an affect...really wanted a happy ending for deena tho, i wanted to see her change like with rochelle.
ReplyDeleteaww its so sad its ended. i feel like i know this girl lool.
Siccck Storrrrrrry !
ReplyDeletelove this story, you guys should carry on or make another stoory.
ReplyDelete+fumez is her brother, errrrrrrr. she fucked her bro.
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LMAO I'm Pissed Off Nw That It Jus Ended Like That KMT
ReplyDeleteOlefumi Is A Girls And Boys Name Loool Played It Sick Nt Gonna Lie An I Correct In Assuming Olefumi Is FUMEZ???
OHHHHHH MYYYYYY GOOOOOD FUMEZ IS HER BROTHER...AM SAD IT ENDED BUT I THINK THIS IS SUCH A GOOD WAY 2 END IT..ROUND OF APLLAUSE FROM ME.
ReplyDeleteAS SOON AS I READ AFRICAN NAME FUMEZ POPED STRAIGHT INTO MY HEAD CUZ I REMEMBER WEN HE SAID HE NAME WAS REALLY OLEFUMI..DER AINT NO OTHER AFRICAN NAME LIKE DAT IN DE STORY BUT EWWW SHE'S ALSO FUCKED HER BROTHER..GOSH!!.
I RATE U FOR DIS STORY I AINT NEVER BEEN ADICTED 2 A STORY LIKE I HAVE ON UR TWO STORY'S. IS DER GONNA BE ANOTHER SKET STORY LINKED WITH DIS ONE SO WE KNOW WHAT HAPPENED OR R U GONNA LEAVE US HANGING..LET US KNO PLS :) XXXX
SOrcha shudda got shot aswell kmt!
ReplyDeleteNaahhh .. . Fumesz Needsz Hisz Story Now .. . Seriouszly I Neeed More .. . Sorchaa Is She Dead . . Im Confused Soz ... . I Loved Ryan Kmt .. . Im Jusz Vex About The Whole Thing . .
ReplyDelete:( unexpected stil ina shock ii say a next chapter shud b added jus yo cleaar tings up (Y)
ReplyDeleteova den dah Best sket story on roadd lol !!!
this has been my LIFEEEEEE for months.. fuck knows what im gonna do now! ! ! props 2 the authorr... fumez being her brother i was not expectin that.. this story is sik.. but are u really REALLY gna leave it there?!?!!? u cannnnnnnnnnnot do this 2 me :( write more!!!!! u shud make this into a filmm.. a book.. a play.. somethin.. anyfin.. plzzz!
ReplyDeleteSHEEETTT! NEVA SAW DAT COMIN NICE WAY TO END UP THE STORY N SORT OUT DA CONFUSION!!!! FUME IS A FUKIN DUMB ASS HE KNUU ALL DIS TIME, DEN KILLS HIS OWN BLUDD KMT LOOOOOOOOOOL
ReplyDeleteLUVED IT DOE,,,, HAVE A FEELIN DAT DIS AINT DA END DOE
HMMMM ??????????????
lool WOOOW!!! that is fucking sick! so if ryan's dad was deena's mum's first does that mean he is fumez's dad too???? and didnt ryan and fumez do a ting loool didnt fumez bone deena?!?! this is sick lool gotta love it doe!
ReplyDeleteAHHHHH ! MAN WHO EVER IS WRITIN DIS NEEDS AN AWARD SWEAR DOWN ! Fumez Uno ! Of ALL PEOPLE ! Gaaah ! Madness. Dis Story Was Sick Doe..Fanks :)
ReplyDeleteThis Is Justt TOO Muchh Mayn ! Jheeze. Ma Mayte Paris Told Me About This Story ! love It, CANT END THERE ! KMT. Lord Did'nt Answer Her Prayer . By Holly x P.S I Lovee Pariss XX
ReplyDeletenoooooooo, how can fumz be her brother!!!! OMGGGGGGG you cnt stop it there the story is just getting to good!
ReplyDeleteThis story has been over emoshional ! Ratings to the author . Your HARDDDD !
ReplyDeletewow fukin hell!!...caught me off guard man...best blog ive ever read...how can it end like that!! i wanna kno more!! excellent author...this needs to hit the big screen this!
ReplyDeleteloved every bit of this story...keep up the gd writing.
ReplyDeleteOMFG NOT FUMEZ ANYONE BUT HIM
ReplyDeleteSHES HAD SEX WITH HER BRO!
I SWEAR I WANA KILL THIS AUTHOR!!!!! lol. fumez is her bro n she fucked him ewwwwwwwwwww!!!
ReplyDeleteALLOW IT! DEENA WASNT MEANT TO DIE, SHE WAS MEANT TO REPANT AND RUN AWAY WITH ROCHELLE. RYAN WAS NOT MEANT TO DIE. HELPING PAULA SHUD AVE DONE SUTTIN 4 HER!!
i'm begging you on my knees.... you have to make some more sket stories... your stories are soo good!!!
ReplyDeleteOlefumi is Fumez Duh(!)
I LOVE DEENA SKET
EVERYONE WE SHOULD PROTEST TO THE AUTHOR SO THEY CAN WRITE NEW SKET STORIES!!!1
Nooooo! you cant end it like this. Why is he tryna kill her for Ryan?
ReplyDeletewhats it got to do with Ryan?
PLEASE DO ONE MORE CHAPTER EXPLAINING IT ALL.
How he found out she was his sister ? How he got out of jail? Why is he doing it for Ryan?
And do a Rochelle on Ryan. Make him come back. I love Ryannn!
one moe one more make it longgg too plss :)
ReplyDelete:O !! Lmao it's Fumez hahaha , wow Mr or Misses writer that was a banging ending :) topped off my amazing last day of school so thankyouuuu :D:D:D, although im abit sad there's going to be no more BUT i am greatful that you took the time to write it out, but like i said before you should write a book and publsh it because you honesty are amzing at storries, why do it for free , and i know i would deffiately buy it and so would a lot of people :D x
ReplyDeleteWTF DO YOU THINK YOUR dOING AUTHORR !
ReplyDeleteYOUR KILLING ME , YOU CANT END DEENA SKET. YOU MUST BE FUCKING BONKERS . FUMEZZZZ #1 FK ME HES HER BROTHER . wait a minute,thats 'INCEST' ERGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH ! OWNER , MAKE A PAULA SKET <3
This cant be happening :(
that was the best ending of a story.....do u no how long i wnted her to die.......but anyways nuff luv to ryan i missed him in da story
ReplyDeleteYESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!
ReplyDeleteShe's Finally Dead.
After Everything That Happened To Her I Thought She Would Have Changed But She Didn't So...
Wish She Died Of HIV/AIDS Though :/
Brilliant! So unexpected and it wasn't predictable. I rate you author because I'm an educated woman but reading a long book doesn't happen because I get bored by the third chapter! I've read all your stories and you are truely talented and have a nact of being able to catch the reader's attention with your cliff hangers and suspense.
ReplyDeleteYou need a deal and quick as you are very talented! Standing ovation, you deserve the best and I'm sure you will have a successful career for years to come!
u deserve a standing ovation......RND OF APLSE GOES 2 U.....wsnt xpectin dt 1 bruv....jheeeeeeeeze hw emtnal ws dt.....wt am I gna do?? cnt blve it....jst nd 2 knw wt hapns 2 fumez, adam, sorcha, natalie. Qck qstion does dis mean dt ryan nd fumez r brthas?? cus dey hve da sme dad no??
ReplyDeleteWELL DONE B....keep it up...talents r unblveable....nd sum mre chaptas tho jst 2 tie up loose endins loooool
Omg but wait -
ReplyDeletewhy did her nan and the priest both say she had a sister?
Is deena actually dead?
What were her results from hospital?
Who was ryans dad talking to in bathroom?
What's gonna happen with sorcha and Adam?
And is that reallyyyyy rochelle?? Cos I assumed she died in the fire....
Please please pleas write more!!!!! Your wicked at writing all dis but I need answerssssss loooool xxxx
Wow dis has been da best story I've read in AGGGEES. I do admite Rochelle Sket was more emotional, n less beatin bt dis been gd anywyz!
ReplyDeleteLoved da whole story, upset dat we ddnt learn mo in da end bt oh well, it ended wit a bang;)
Fumez from da start till da end yh man!
It is gross dem two fucked n shizz bt den again it sounds like neither of em knew bout each other,he dd say dat was da FIRST time seein his mom alie? So rlly he cud've thut some1 else was his mom n only found out bout it in pen
I hope ders more stories comin out cuz dis blog's become a part of ma life loool
Nice work to da author, AMAZING WRITER :) x
& scorchas still bretahing yh?
ReplyDeletesafe.
Why Dont You Continue It But Make It About Olefumi An Wah Happend After
ReplyDeleteOH WHY DID u have it that was one of the best stories i read in my life. ewwww fumez and deena fucked thats nasty. and i thought deena and natalie were gonna make up sorcha die. ohh i miss ryan i really loved him u kno best guy in this story and sorcha shud of died. fumez really has no heart why wud u kill ur own sister and the thing i dont get is why is he sayin this is for ryan. ryan wudnt of wanted him to kill deena after he loved her
ReplyDeletethis was just as good as rochelle sket.
ReplyDeletecant believe FUMEZ is her brother :\ but i wanted to know why he was dressed like a girl! and how did he know he was deenas brother, did he know all along? cos if he did then he committed incest, deena didnt know. and i wanted to know more about michelle and sandra and everyone. need more chapters cos i hate being left hanging with all these unanswered questions
is this even fair ?
ReplyDeletec'mon now people she didnt know fumez was her brother so she didnbt know it was direct incest
thats not her fault its fumez for not telling her , he is the main sicko
AUTHOR AUTHOR AUTHOR !
you trying to kill me ?
'llow it , this story was my life since it started , you cant finish it like that
please have some sort of spin off
how about fumez point of view cause all your stories have been based on a female P.O.V
PLEAAAAAAAAAAAASE dont leave me hanging :'(
I RATE THIS AUTHOR
ReplyDeleteAM TELLING YOU PUBLISH A BOOK, YOU WILL GET BIG
:D XXX
OOOOOOOOOOOMMMMMMMMMMMMMMGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG, WTF FUMEZ IS HA BRUVA N SHE WOZ FUKIN HIM EWWWWWW BUT OOOOO MAH DAIIZ DIS STORY IS SOOOO LIVE YU DNT EVEN UNDERSTAND HW ADDICTED I WOZ TO IT,, IN MAH EXAMS I WOZ TINKING BWT DIS,, DIS CAN NT B THA ENDING IM TELLIN YU IT CNT B,, OOOOOOOOOOOMMMMMMMMMMGGGGGGGGGGGG IS ALL I CN SAY,, JHEEEZE DIS NEEDS TU B A FILM,, I SWEAR DWN I WILL RAH PAY THA £6 TU GO N C DIS OOO LARD,, LET MII BREATH NW lol
ReplyDeleter u lot forgetting that she fucked her uncle thats incest aswell aint it was fumez born with a willy and fanny? This story has pissed me right off u cant leave it there man come on another 5 2 10 chapters pleaaaaaassssse
ReplyDeleteohhhh was Fumez and ryan the two that were doing things ? and best line in the story that will stick with me will always be when Ryan tells Deena he's 'pansexual' and he just comes out with "gooogle it" hahahaha made my year, oh and when fmez was bangin someone and he must have been like say my name and she came out with Olefumi and he goes no my fxckiin road name hahahahaha i loved this story really, but im still kind of baffed at this point i don't really get it like , would it be possible to do another chapter justto explain everything from start to finish because i dont get why Fumez was said to be a girl, why he was killin Deena for Ryan ... was it because she only gave Ryan an allabi? or whatever it is that happened.. when Ryan found her and she tried to run and he claimed he had 'changed' was that all a lie did, did he know Fumez was going to come out and kill Deena? and what happened to sorcha and that boy being locked in the room, and what happened to Adam ? and and and How did fumez bang her if he knew that was his sister?? arghhh confused.com mayn, but still story was gooooooooooood
ReplyDeleteAMAZING STORY
ReplyDeleteU MAD TALENTED SHIT
ARGHH DIS WAS D BEST ONE SO FAR FROM ALL DA SKETS U GOTTA DO ANOTHER ONE DAMM!!
Great story from beginning to end.
ReplyDeleteAuthor consider putting advertisements on your blogs to make some money from them, consider it if you do write another story. you need to get paid!
Amazing writing, i've actually been hooked from the beginning. It's sad that this is the ending, and I know that another 'sket' story would make so many people happy.
ReplyDeleteI unlike many people don't actually think that Deena is a sket though. She is the victim of abuse, and there are many men who live their lives exactly like Deena. For example; Smurkz said that he had slept with ninety women, and Deena was impressed. I even think somebody commented that he was attractive because of that, whilst others said that Deena isn't attractive because of the amount of men she has slept with.
Best story ever.
whats next? another story?
ReplyDeleteMy mouth was open the whole time lol. the last line was too good. damn man bt allow ending it lyk dis
ReplyDeleteYou Never Know If The Gun Is Pointinq At Him x Or Aimed OutSide The Curtainz x
ReplyDeleteWow x Fumez x Thatz Both Depressinq&Hilarious x
Thank The Lord For Rochelle x
LOL x
Hope This Aint The End x
aTrue Well Done For Keepinq All Of Ys Till Chapter 70 !!!!!!
I HOPE YOU MAKE ANOTHER CHAPTER OR NEW STORY COZ YOU CAN'T JUST LEAVE IT LIKE THAT LOOOL.
ReplyDeleteIN COMPLETE SHOCK BUT 10,000 & MORE RATINGS TO THE AUTHOR !! WELL DONE.
NUFF LOVE.
<3
upload more NOWWW
ReplyDeleteCheese and flippin bread is all i can say!
ReplyDeleteIs it all really over (
WHY DOES SHE HAVE TO DIEE, NONONOOOOO AND ITS BY HER BROTHERR TOO. FUCK SAKEE! PLEASE THIS CANT ENDD
ReplyDeleteAMAZINGG, another sket story please ?
ReplyDeleteiAmm abosulutly Gobsmackedd Omgg GeeWizz!!!
ReplyDeleteFumesz was her brudaa all along ?? So y was he in a pink dress??? in dat pick omg omg omg how da fuk did he escape pen
PLEASSSEE DONT END IT HERREEEEEE!!!
YOU HAVE TO DO A CHAPTER ON HER BROTHERS POINT OF VIEW.
ReplyDeleteBECAUSE THIS AINT TELLING US ANYTHING.
OMG FUMEZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteErrrrr and she fucked him how many times??
brilliant story had me on the edge of my seat plenty of times! disappointed its come to an end :( !
ReplyDeletewell done to the author for writing such a great story x
Oh my days u can't just end it like dat
ReplyDeleteWrite sum more please ur stories r to good
Plus we need to know for sure if fumez is her brother
And will deena ever walk again
Does she dye
Please please please write more ur to talented not.
"They looked fumin. Then they pulled out a strap."
ReplyDeleteHAHAAA...as soon as you said 'fumin' I clocked!
Speechless, best storyy outtttt!
You need to get it published 'cause you have mad talent!
BTW, it would be nice if you added more chapters in The Sorcha Beat or Deena Dialogues explaining stuff because I'm slightly baffed.
Mad ratingss don.
I THINK THA NEXT SKET STORIE SHUD B ABOUT THAT PLAULA CHICKK RYANS SISTER ... IN MY OPINIONN
ReplyDeleteHow do u noe its fumze
ReplyDeleteReally Really Good Story, I was hooked from the first day my friend reccommended it to me! Fumezzzzzzzz what a shock! Love it!!!!!!
ReplyDeletegood job with the story! cant believe its overrrr! :( we want more !!!!!!
ReplyDeleteand its GOOD deena died, ppl stop complainin after u was sayin how u wished she died for bein a slut and now shes dead HURRAY LOL
good story doe, keep it up!
very well written but a shocking story
ReplyDeletecould of ending better still why would fumz b her brother
This is phenomenal, I hope you author are doing something with your talent that will really make you a household name, you should consider writing for television and film...
ReplyDeletebut OMGGGG WAIT WAIT WAIT....just because Ryans dad was Deena's mum first doesnt mean he is the one who got Deena's mum pregnant, and second why does Fumez have a Nigerian name then if he grew up in Barbados? I dont think he knew Deena was his sister when he lined up her cos I dont think anyone told him who his real mum was, I think he found out....
also yeah it would be too nasty if Ryans dad was Fumez dad cos that mean ALLAAA them slept with their own kin...and thats sooo wronggg
but yeah author nothing has kept me so enraptured for so long in my LIFE. you are a genius!
This Has Been An Amzing Story ,, Deena Babesz ,, The Future is Alwaiis Unwritten.
ReplyDeleteAn Amzing Twist ,, Fumesz Her Brother ,, Who She Fucked ,, OMD Haa Haa ,, Oh Well :D
you need to just answer the questions that have been put out der and wrap up the story. yeah you could make doe from these but you need to wrap up storylines! unless ur gonna come with a whole next sket story thats gonna give answers to these ones ur gonna lose fans!!
ReplyDeleteomg. naah der needs to me more man!! how can a story doo datt!! likkee naah mann do some additional exclusive chapter! Great stories man!!
ReplyDeletecos fumze real name is olefumi (well it makes sense)
ReplyDeleteamber-
They looked fumin. Then they pulled out a strap.
ReplyDelete"Im doin this for Ryan."
how did he know that ryan wanted her dead.
This cant be the end.
go up to 100 plzzz :'(
Whens the next story coming x
ReplyDeletei dnt think this is the end i think he killed himself not her
ReplyDeleteThat was absolutely brilliant, if i do say so myself!
ReplyDeleteI fully agree with the person that said you should make a movie, or at least a book!
I would really buy your books, they had me hooked... Can't believe Deena's dead. She was a slag but because we got to know her, for some reason I never wanted harm to reach her way... Keep up the good work, and i hope to find myself reading another story, possibly Paula next ;)
DIS STORY WAS BANGIN I CNT BLELIVE FUMEZ IS HER BRO RAHTID
ReplyDeleteAUTHOR MR /,ISSES URE AMAZING PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE WRITE ANOTHER CHAPTER JUS TO EXPLAIN THINGS
I ALSO THINK U SHOULD WRITE ANOTHER STORY FROM A BOYS POINT OF VIEW IT WOULD BE NICE TOO SEE IT FRM A BOIS PROSECTIVE.....
WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW ROCHELLE SKET WAS GOOD
BUT THIS BEAT IT BY FAR
URE AMAZING I WOULD SO PAY MONEY TO WATCH THIS
U SHOULD HOLLA AT NOEL CLARK LOL
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im so sad dat dis stori has ended da amount of tyms ppl r lookin at me lyk im mad coz im creasin at ur wun liners,
ReplyDeleteomg i fink im gunna strt cryin, aww, it over deena sket is really over
ive been a fan frm day wun n ive neva been dissapointed, ur talented amazes me.
at first i woz pissed at the endin but now i can see dat its realli quite good.da onli fing dat im wunderin is?......
Y DA FUCK IS SORCHA STILL ALIVE!!!
ill luv u *sniff* deena foreva and always
u were a *sniff* true sket
It Could have done with a better ending, but apart from that.... DIS STORY WAS BANGINN! JHEEEZE!
ReplyDeleteim so glad dta ur writing a new sket story
ReplyDeleteyayyyy
il b countin down the days
OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH SHE GOT DONE.
ReplyDeleteDeena Sket 2 !!!
ReplyDeletewe need moreeeeeeeeee it cant end here :(
FFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMEEEEEEEEEEEEEEZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ!
ReplyDeletethis story was tooo hard... OMG FUMEZ.... Fucking his own sister thats not serious u cant end it here....
ReplyDeleteWhats happens to SORCHA n ADAM? Deena's mum? Hats off to the author your to hard
nooooooo <3
ReplyDeleteI'm glad the story is done, no more w8in impatiently 4 each chapter :-P
ReplyDeleteOooooh P is 4 Paula...ok? But who is Saisha? :D can't wait to find out boi! More more more pllleeeeaaasseee! Lol
ReplyDeleteARE YOU GONNA DO ANOTHER ONE?
ReplyDeletePLLLLLZZZ!
Such a good story can't believe it ended like that thats plan nastu that fumez fucked up his own sister and how could he just exscape from pen like that? well done author this is brillant and a juicy story
ReplyDeleteNOOOOO NOOO NOOO DONT END IT YET !!!
ReplyDeleteAHH THIS GIRL NEEDS TO MAKE A DEENA THE SKET NO 2.
I NEED TO FIND OUT IF SHE'S DEAD ! :(
wat so everyone in dis stroy is related accept for natelie errrr that means ryan n fumez/olefumi r half brothers dey come from the same dad n dey were on a ting naaarh.
ReplyDeletey is sorcha alive u should of killed her off.
lol imagine rollin on road wid da name olefumi HA.destroyment. ahh i beg u make a sequel cuz rahhh dis was da shitttttttttt. but its unrealistic doe cuz real talks deena was only carryin a yout once. man if dis was real she would of repopulated dah earth by now
FULL 5* ratings
some of u guyz are ediats like of course chick dead did u not read dat she was gunn stop it at captah seventy xx
ReplyDeletejus sayin
you rats need to understand that Deena was, is, and will also be... MADE UP! bare gettin emotional over a sket. and im thankful that its finished cos now i can concetrate on my GCSE's. but a BIG UP TO THE AUTHOUR!!! RESPECT!! MAD RESPECT FOR YA. AND THERS A HIDDEN MESSAGE IN THIS STORY::: DO SUMMIN WIT UR LIFE!
ReplyDeleteWith her lifestyle I knew she'd end up diseased, hurt ot dead. She chose the street
ReplyDeletei loved this...i have my fukin GCSE to revise for but i sat at home reading this... it was worth it :) xx
ReplyDeleteOMDZZZZZZZZZZZZZ I JUST CRIEDDDD!!!! ALL THIS TIME FUMEZZZZZZZZZ!!!!! i actually have hoosebumps swear down!!!! cant wait for the others!!!!!!!!!!!! bravo, bra fucking vo!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeletewhos saisha? was she mentioned in this story.
ReplyDeleteIt depends on were u get shot
ReplyDeletepeepl survive gunshots to da he'd so u Neva no
always double tap u can Neva b to sure som 1 is ful dead
This Doesn't Make Sense.
ReplyDeleteHow Can They Be Brother & Sister If He's Nigerian And She's Bajan & Irainian?
Enjoyed this so much, bring on P is for Paula/Saisha Sket !!
ReplyDeleteaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa !!! omfg fumes is her bruva swear dwn dis story needs 2 b made into a movie i wuld buy all da dvds in da shop an alsorts damn !!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteOMDZZZZZZZZ Why did it end like dat man??
ReplyDeleteFumez is her brother, How could he do that to her? And for Ryan who snitched on him to da feds. KMT Please continue. Like is Deena dead or did Fumez kill him self X(
omfg u can't end it dere u bastards do more i'm so addictive i bloudy read it in my ict class nd wen i have my english lesson in the ict room. blud deena r.i.p. if u died ryan i dont give a shit wether u died or not u fking bastard nd i hope ur dad is fking dead too.
ReplyDeleteDeena's nan has done too much for her man go nd live ur life young (old) lady in barbados.
deena ur mum is fked up nd she is a fking hypercrit.
Please update the other blogs because I'm missing my hoodtales daily fix!! And I love your style of writing. :)
ReplyDeleteI stayed up until 4am just to read this cos I felt so addicted,
ReplyDeleteCried bare times for her, cos we all have a friend like her
OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
ReplyDeleteMYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY
FUCKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKK
I HAVE GOOSE BUMPSSS!!!
OMG iBeg You 2 Do A Second Part As The Ending Coz Dis Is Clear Buh We Want More Info I.E Her Funeral And What Hapens Afta' Fankss x
ReplyDeletewowwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww...i cant wait for the next onee! i love you haha
ReplyDeleteOMD I LOVE DIS!
ReplyDeleteThe writer is bangin omd I LOVE DEENA THE SKET!
shit the first time i herd bout dis i was like ooooo and den went to go check it out and was addicted to it lool.
THE ENDING OMG I CNT BELIEVE IT WHYYYYY?? This aint true is it lool jst wonderin
Has anybody actually stopped and considered that maybe, just maybe, the Deena sequel will be part and parcel of Paula/Saisha sket... We know that Paula has met Deena and knows who she is, so she must attend her funeral if that is to be the case (which I'm praying it's not, cos I love Deena!) ..
ReplyDeleteI think we should all kick back and keep up the patient waiting .... 2 weeks to go !!
Cannot wait for paula the sket... this shud b gr8 x
ReplyDeletehazz deena gt hiv or nt....?
ReplyDeleteohhhhhhhhhhh i just read that last lil piece saying there's going to be another story !!! thankyouuuuuuuu Mr/Mrs writer :) x
ReplyDeleteI bet you its ADAM!!!!
ReplyDeletelol yea is she hiv or not??????????
1 more day 2 go!!! can't wait! i've missed deena man! paula shud be jus as gud!!
ReplyDeletep.s did ne1 think fumez cudda shot deena an sed it woz 4 ryan cos he jus saw deena gettin fucked by ryans dad on the day of his funeral???????
its the 29th of june..where is Paula/saisha sket?
ReplyDeletehav u started da new story yet? and where can we find it?
ReplyDeleteerm.... Ive Been Staring At This Blog Waiting Patiently For The Saisha Sket Story... (Sighs). Guess Ima Have To Try Again Later.. This Is Killing Me!
ReplyDeleteBut fumez was describes as being a sexy nigerian so how does that make sense if deena is half arab half beigan....-_- dissapointment
ReplyDeleteIts The 29 Wots Going On ????????
ReplyDeletewaiting for the next one?xxx
ReplyDeletewheres the story ?
ReplyDeleteahh ii swr P IS FOR PAULA/ Saisha Sket sud bee owt tuday ???
ReplyDeleteWhere's the next story?
ReplyDeleteFort Dah New Storry Was Gunnar B Up Today :(
ReplyDeleteWhere Is Mayn I'm Waiting ! JHEEEZZEEEEEE
Urm... *cough* where is the blog? And why give a date if it won't be up on that day?
ReplyDeleteKmt..
How Do iRead The P is for Paula/Saisha Sket
ReplyDeletewheres p is for paula ..????
ReplyDeletewheres the chapter then =\
ReplyDeleteIt's the 30th today.......so wheres the next installment? HURRY URPPPPPPPPPP!!!!
ReplyDeletewere is the new stori plz
ReplyDeletemake it cum out soon
i carnt wait
ive been countin dwn the days n evryfin
is the Paula story coming now?
ReplyDeleteOleyfumi LOL
ReplyDeleteOh My Gosh Wens Dah New Story Coming Out!
ReplyDeleteI Bare Waited Nd Ting!
Arr, Itsz Killin Me Inside !
ok, im a lil confused now.. it says theres gonna be another story on the 29th.
ReplyDeletei set my bb to remind me.
im bored without these stories.
i want another story.
WHEREE IS THE NEXT STORYY!!! dont do this to me!
come on come on come on...... wheres the new blog i feel like iv been waitin over a year... i need it
ReplyDeleteso where is paula sket??
ReplyDeleteits 1 of july!! wheres the new sket blogsss? ive been waiting for over a month...hmm writer is slipping lol :)
ReplyDeleteSoooooo it's not July 1st....where's the Paula/Saisha sket story??? I can't take these withdrawal symptoms much longer!!
ReplyDeleteWhat's happening to P is for Paula/Saisha Sket???
ReplyDeleteEErrrrmmm!! 29th of June WHEN??!! 2012??!!!
ReplyDeleteI'm gagging for some sket action! When am I gonna get iiitttTTTT!!!?????
Its 1st of July now and NO SIGN!
KMFT!..Ur dealin with an addict here and I've already waited for over a MONTH!...
U tryin to make me kick off or what?! LOL
PLEASE...hurry!!! P for feckin Paula and Saisha stinkin Sket, needs to land B4 this weekend begins....u hear?! Get it poppin off mate!
P-L-E-A-S-E!! x x x x
(And Fanx!)
sick ending girl..i love this story :)..can you check out mine please i've just started :)..x
ReplyDeletehttp://swarovskisoflondon.blogspot.com/
Its now July 1st and I aint seein no p is for paula/shaisha sket...? What happened to it being up on the 29th of June? Come on mannnn I'm still checkin this ish everydayyy lol
ReplyDeleteam i the only onw wondering when "Saisha Sket" is gona start... like whats the laylay????
ReplyDeletewhere can i read the new story "P IS FOR PAULA/ Saisha Sket"???? cant find it anywhere
ReplyDeleteWhere the new story :(
ReplyDeleteWEN IZZ PAULAA SKET CUMMINN MAYNEE JHEEZ I CNT WAIIT FORR ITTT IT SED 29TH JUNE ITZ NOW 2ND JULYY HURRRY UP MAYNEE :D
ReplyDeletewaaaaait!!!! i thought that you was suppose to post paula sket story the 29th of june!!!! now its july!!!!! hurry up!!!
ReplyDeleteIs The New Wun Out Yet????
ReplyDeletecan someone pls tell me when the new one is coming out and where i can find it
ReplyDeleteWhere is paula sket?! been checking this everyday like some stalker lol hurry up and post a link!
ReplyDeletei fort paula da sket was cumin out in june 29th....still waitin :(
ReplyDeleteerm i thought the new one would be out now...whats going on...is the author lackin on her followers..
ReplyDeleteWHERE IS THE NEW PAULA SKET THING?????? I FORT IT WUD BE OUT ON JUNE 29TH ?????!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11
ReplyDeleteOMGOSHH ! DIS STORY WAS GD
ReplyDeleteBUHH WENS PAULA THE SKET CUMIN OUT ? x