i look up and just started cryin. All i could think about was Sorcha and the picture.
Jesse looked at Smurkz and said "wheres the charlie?".
Smurkz said, "upstairs bruv- u didnt see it?".
Then Jesse looked down at me and looked up at Smurkz, "where upstairs?"he asked.
WTF. How did Jesse and Smurkz even know each other.
"Deena aint you surprised to see Jesse here, tru say u used to fuck him," i looked at jesse, and he said, "i met my man at some rave and he told me u fucked him too- and that prick ryan,"
Smurkz kicked me in my right tit and then whipped out his dick, "suck it," he said.
I got up and put it in my mouth and sucked as i cried, he was punchin me as i sucked.
"Oi, whens that bre comin to collect his dro," Dee asked Jesse.
"About ten minutes," Jesse said, "ive weighed it up and shit, and the charlies all there yeah?".
Smurkz nodded, "u can get ur piece once it's all be sold innit, shouldcome to about 3 bags,"
He punched me, Jesse said, "three bags worth of coke here right now,"
Smurkz said, "Im a fuckin hustler,".
Dee laughed and said to me, "Ur boy Ryan fucked bare of us over, he try mug off Smurkz, he banged up Jesse and his boy but now he's in afuckin morgue, he's probably gonna be suckin dick in hell."
Smurkz laughed and said, "sick sick,". Jesse laughed.
"Ur lookin worse for wear Deena," he said.
I felt sick and vomited all over the carpet, bare white stuff came out with it.
Smurkz kicked me in my jaw, "she's vomitin cum!", Frisky screamed, i kept vomitin and vomitin, it was all the food i'd eaten with bare white fluid, Smurkz kicked me and said, "lick it up,".
I cried.
He kicked me in my forehead and said, "LICK IT!".
I cried as i lowered my head to the carpet when Jesse said, "nah nah,just make her clean it up, i wanna draw brain off her still, lemme go get some CIF and a sponge from the bathroom."
Jesse went up stairs and Smurkz gave him a weird look.
Then Jesse came back down and said "Actually Deena- come and get it urself u bosh,". Smurkz looked at jesse and laughed, "sick guy, u heard him deena, go get the fuckin cif to clean up your shit, Lil kim."
jesse pulled me up and slapped my face and said, "wheres ryan now,"
he pulled me up the stairs, i was cryin so hard. he pushed me into the bathroom and locked the door.
"Im gonna get u out, ive only got ten minutes," he said, "the feds are comin here for a raid."
He was whisperin, i couldnt stop cryin, "deena, listen- im gonna get u out, but u need to be quick."
"why are u helping me," i cried.
"Man fucked about the last time, this aint right- u dont deserve this, listen, in a bit, im gonna back down by myself and as soon as i get to the last step run down, unlock the door and duss,".
"I have no shoes," i cried, i was sobbing.
"Wait here."
He left the bathroom and i sat on the toilet cryin, why the fuck was he helpin me, the sun was comin out. he walked back in a tracksuit and creps. "put this on,"
he threw them at me, i quickly put them on top of sorcha's pyjamas.
I looked at him, "dont tell anyone u were ever here deena."
"Ur snitchin on them," i said, "ur workin for the feds,"
He didnt say anythin and said, "get ready, wait at the top of the stairs and when im at the bottom step run down and get out of here, dont stop just duss,".
"why are u helpin me," i asked.
He looked at me and said, "deena- if u tell anyone dat i helped you."
"i wont," i said wipin my eyes. I felt a mixture of fear and excitement, like i was gonna escape.
"start groanin," he said.
I started actin like i was gettin fucked so they wouldnt get suspicious. Then Jesse went out of the bathroom, i followed him to the top of the stairs and waited till he was at the bottom step, the creps were heavy, they were one size too big but as soon as he was the bottom step, i dussed down the stairs pushin jesse, and unlocked the door.
Smurkz started screamin but i just ran, i ran down the stairs of the estate and ran out onto the main road, there were people goin work, i didnt car ei just ran, and then i saw bare police cars drivin toward the estate.
I just ran as i saw the feds jump out of their whips and run up the estate, i pushed past people, i was jus running so fast, my legs were tired but i didnt care, i had to keep on dussin, i pushed some old lady to the floor and kept on runnin, i had to cross the road, i saw abus that went near my ends, i didnt have no money, so den i realized i had no way of getting back, i felt like i was gonna vomit, i saw a mcdonalds across the road.
I ran into the road.
BAM.
Thursday 20 May 2010
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ReplyDeleteOH MY GODDDDDD !! kEEP IT COMINGG!! pleaaaase.. !
ReplyDeleteOh shit, she been hit by a car????
ReplyDeleteWHATTTTT dont tell me she got hit by a car!?!?!
ReplyDeleteNO WAY!!!
you are KIDDINGGG ohhhh my days..
please write the next chapter ASAPPP
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH EMOSH ! EMOSH! EMOSH! DEENA!
ReplyDeletethis is gettin me hyped you need to write dese quicker. gettin me emosh
ReplyDelete!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!
UPDATE TO THE NEXT CHAPTER PLEASE!!! ITS TOO SHORT!
Im quite amazed that Jesse helped her....
DEENA CANT DIE NOW!!
next chapter, hurry up pls
ReplyDeleteshe got hit by a car. oh dear
Ahhhh, short chapters... not happy, it shortens the story :(
ReplyDeleteSuuugaar !
ReplyDeletethis is effin great :P
iloveit . like im actualyl hoooooooooooooooked !
OHHHHHHHH PLZ PLZ HURRY WITH DA NEXT CHAPTER ALLOW KEEPIN USS HANGINNNN I AVE WAITIN FOR WT HAPPENS NEXT FOR 2 LNGGG... NEXXXXXXX CHAPTERRRRRR!
ReplyDeleteawww shit she got run over? why does this shit keep happening to Deena!
ReplyDeletelol at least if she ends up in hospital she'll be safe and have someone to care for her.
shettt bet u she get lick ova by one big ole bus jheeez n sumone had 2 help her maaan,, tru say we waited bare long n dis chapta is a bit short,, still luvin it doe keep em comin pleeease
ReplyDeleteOMG!!!
ReplyDeleteJUICCEYYY
Jesse helping Deena.. WAHHHHHHHHHHHHH????
Hahaha snitch yh but safe one .. oh shit too much going on.. kinda sounding like rochelle escape when she got hit by a car
omgg what happened to sorcha still??
pleasepleasepleasepleaeplease I BEG YOU PUT UP THE NEXT CHAPTER..
CHICK MISSED COLLEGE FOR THIS DAY LOLZ
NOOOOOOOooooooooooooo Deena Cant Diee NEXT CHAPTER ASAP
ReplyDeleteTOOO Emoshh :'(
PEEK.
ReplyDeleteahh i cant believe thiss
ReplyDeletei forgot who jesse is someone tell me cos i cant be boverd to re read it all again but omyy chapters do need to keep coming quicker i keep looking everyday to see if theres a next chapter thats how hooked i am lorrd!
WRITE LONGER CHAPTERS ... IT WAS GOOD .
ReplyDeleteThat shows all she does is suck dick cus when she vomited dats all came out..der's 2 much of dat shit in her body.. but i do feel sorry 4 her u kno cum on give her a break.
ReplyDeletethis was quite short but am not gonna complain cus u gave us 2 chapter before..cant wait 4 da next 1.
LOL SHE GOT RUNOVER. HAHA!
ReplyDeleteBAM?? wat happens. this author loves leavin us in suspence
ReplyDeleteis it me, or did this give anyone else chills. the image of the sun coming up with deena escaping, its sort of symbolic, she was trapped in the dark but the sun sets her free (then she gets hit by a vehicle)
ReplyDeletedeena gets hit omg
ReplyDeletewow jesse may God bless u and smurkz should rot in prison kmmmt propa rubbing it in tht ryan is dead which i am still coming to terms with wow just imagine if denna never went to get gang bangd by ryan and whoever then none of this would have happend hard chapter still just to think its all coming to an end in 9 chapters the suspense is killin me xxx
ReplyDeletedat cmmnt sayin how dis woz spirtual is chattin bare shit. lol
ReplyDeletebut urghhh dats narsty vomitin up cum.
shes lucky dat jesse woz a snake aint she
LOOOOL oh shitt, don't tell me da gyal ran staright into a moving car LOL
ReplyDeletewoiii dat was emoshh man keep it coming.
N LONGER CHAPTERS PLEASEEEE.
ive been clicking on refresh all day!!!! come on you cant leave with such a hard cliffhanger!!! that was great i had a feeling that he was gonna help her.... but when she leaves where she going to and hows he gonna find her???? SHE GOT KNOCKED OVER!!!! mudnesss!! MORE NOW PLEASE!!!
ReplyDeleteman i cant believ it-a decent male in dis story (although he stil WAS a dick b4)
ReplyDeletey is evry1 4etin jesse-da 1st 'link' in da series. frens wif faisaini??
smurks is pure evil-u shud do a 'smurkz' blog 2 c y hes da way he is!
Peaaaaaakkkkkkk
ReplyDeleteSoz Deenaa
Wahh A Shame - Lol
peak deana can't die now nooooooooo
ReplyDeletewow is she finally died..
ReplyDeletelol as if!
cnt wait til ryan comes bac to life!
Looooool I Didn't Evn Clok She Got Hit By A Car Until I Read Tha Comments
ReplyDeletePeople love to complain about short chapters and telling the author to hurry up and write a next one, like she hasn't got a life outside of this blog! You know she uploaded 2 chapters last time! Calm down guys, patience is a virtue!
ReplyDeleteLoved this chapter, if she ends up in hospital then smurkz is gonna find her. Not to mention Sorcha that snake.
i just clocked adam is the one who gave scorchers key to smurks snakey guy...,
ReplyDeleteI actually cant breatheee oh Deeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeenaaaaaaaaaaaaa
ReplyDeleteyou cant dieeee nowwwww..hope she's okayyyyyyy
Hmmmm, waited AGES for this short chapter, still. And we're kinda none the wiser for it.
ReplyDeleteI know this aint how Deena's goin out!! Killed in a road accident! Not after all the shysty stuff shes been inna. Just another trip to the hospital methinks...and she'll be diagnosed with bare STI type stuff too...and maybe another preganancy!
Next one TODAY pls author :-)
i fink corey shud come bck-breathe his 'bref dat stinks like he smoked poo' bref at smurkz and dee, dat wud probs kill dem!
ReplyDeleteliked the the little twist with Jesse - bet any money it is her mom or dad driving the whip lol
ReplyDeletethis was mad
ReplyDeletei love jesse lol
cant wait for the next one
Jesse is symbolic because he was the first link in this story, he turned into her enemy and now hes saved her. God bless him. Deena running gave me chills man, imagine a girl as beautiful as her all fucked up (dont forget it was just a few hours ago that she was gangbanged by the yardies and chanels dad and discovered she has a sister) and to fight sorcha, omg, then get kidnapped.
ReplyDeletethen hit by acar. and i thought my life was eventful
chokes on her own saliva here!!
ReplyDeleteput the next fkin chapter up!!!!!!!! z
ReplyDeleteDis storys hard, No lie :)
ReplyDeleteit don't say she got hit by a car.
ReplyDeleteyou're all just assuming she did.
with this story, nothing is ever like it seems.
so because it seems like she got hit by a car, more than likley she hasn't been.
too many twists.
and stop with the short chapters.
Peak Tyms For Her Boii !
ReplyDeleteWHYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY.
ReplyDeleteplease dont let her die|:
Alloww Deena she's bin through too much Shiit in her life!
ReplyDeleteDeena, This is what happens when you don't stop, look and listen, LOOL.
ReplyDeletecmon next chapter please!!!
ReplyDeletemaybe after hosptial she can start a new identity like rochelle did!
ReplyDeletebut rahh the chappy was emosh stilll!!!
CAN I REMIND U LOT DAT WE STILL DNT KNO HUU HER SISTA IS YETT ... JESSE DIID THE RIGHT THING IN THA END
ReplyDeleteAUTHORR DIIS STORY IS HARD STILL
HURRY UP WITH NEXT CHAPTER MAN THIS IS GETTING TOOO GOOD AND DONT KILL DEENA THE STORY IS NOTHING WITHOUT HER AND I MISS RYAN :'( R.I.P RYAN LOVE YAH
ReplyDeleteDear Author- When Is Dah Next Chapter Coming- I'M DYING HERE- Dah Suspense Is Bloody Killing Me
ReplyDeleteSTORY IS FUCKING BRILLIANT BTW.. WELL DONE !
shet dis is ard i rah hope that shes run in to her sister so some thing and she helps deena get outta her shit aww i feelz sorry for her and ent jesse the one that try rape her dat nite?
ReplyDeleteWheres da next chapter? Ive been waiting for a WHOLE day! XD
ReplyDeleteyou lot should get on twitter if u dont have it,cos dats where the author tweets all the info, all my twitter heads know what im talkin about, every night is sick on dere cos the author actually speaks to you.
ReplyDeletewhaaaat the fooooookkkkk ! :| LOL
ReplyDeleteSHEEET!! dis is too good 2 be tru man i bet u she dnt even knock over hmmm... next chapii please
ReplyDeleteJesses'z The One FoR Her
ReplyDeleteIM SO SAD RYAN DIED :(((((((( I MISS HIM THE SEXIEST AND PENGEST AND HOTTESH AND BESTEST GUYY IN THIS STORY. STUPID BITCH SORCHA SETTIN UP HERE OWN COUSIN KMFT. JESSE UR SO I CANT BELIEVE U SAVED HER
ReplyDeleteNOT BEING RUDE BUT ONLY DOPEY PEOPLE RUN OUT ON THE ROAD . WAIT FOR THE TRAFFIC LIGHT NEXT TIME ! :)<33333333333
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