Thursday 27 May 2010

CHAPTER 68 part 1.

"Your sister is...."
"Who,who!".
"My pussy!", she smacked around the head, i screamed as she tried to tear the euro ticket from my hand.
My head was throbbin, i backhanded her.
She fell on the chair.

I held the ticket high, "why the fuck do you need to jack my id to leave the country,"
She looked at me, "Deena please gimme the ticket."
I stepped back, "nah nah," i said, "u tore that picture knowin how much it means to me,"

"Please Deena, i need to leave,"
Then she looked at me and said, "what happpend 2 u when u left me here,"
I kissed my teeth, "shut up,"
"Deena please- I need to leave,"
"With Adam?", i asked
She looked away.

"He loves me innit," she said.
"U set ur owncousin to get shanked and then u try run away on his funeral,"
"SHUT UP!", she said, "You are the dumbest bosh Ive ever met in my life, Ryan tried to kill me, he tried to kill Diane, he almost killed you, he snitched on Fumez, he fucked u up multiple times and ur still dangling on his sack, eediat eediat!".

"Why would Ryan wanna kill you and Diane, diane's his baby mum, she was his youts mum."

"Two words, Ryan is a bosh!". she said.

"What r u talkin about?".

"You know what you are Deena- you're one of them girls who couldn't take a hint even if it took a shit on your headpiece, Ryan used to do some tings tht he didnt want anyone to know about- some tings he could get killed for and Diane found out and toldsomeone and I told someone else, then ryan found out- I dont know how he did it- but he must have known me an diane were gonna so shot at that house cos i know he arranged for both of us to be killed, he set up the mum of his son to be killed and now there's a boy who'll forget his mums voice because of Ryan, he aint no hero Deena, he isn't Gandhi or Marvin X, he aint no civil rights leader, he was a prick, a pussyhole pansexual prick, dats why i dont give a shit deena and u shldnt either."


"You're lyin, ryan wouldnt do that,"
"COUNT YOUR FUCKIN BLESSINS DEENA! If Ryan was still alive, he'd be beating u up everyday, he never loved u, noones ever loved u, ur dad dont want u, ur mum didnt want u, ur nans a tief, ur own uncle fucked u and the only guy who ever treated you good is in love with me, how do you feel babes, how do you feel?".

I started cryin.
"You know what," she laufed, "if u fixed up again like you used to you could easily be a light skin Lola Monroe, now you look like a tramp."

She slapped me, "and you're a pussy too,"
She took the ticket from my hand, i just cried, "now leave my yard," she said.
I went to leave and then turned to her and said, "Just one thing before I go,"
"What"

I took her fake passport t and Adams passport from out of my hand and tore out every single page. She screamed.

"how are u gonna travel without a passport?".
I threw the pages down to the floor.
She started cryin, "u bitch!"
She tried to pick up the pages as she cried,

"Too bad," i said, "now ur stuck, u see how annoying it is when someone keeps blockin your progress- u see what its like when someone keeps tryna hold u back,thats all u ever did to me, so now ill do it to you, your stuck."

She started having a panic attack. "Deena i need to leave now- I cant stay- please, help me."
"Look at you," i said, "you'd set up your own mum if it paid the rent,"
She ran to the curtains and closed them.
"They're gonna get me," she cried.
"Who's gonna get u,"
"Deena please help me- I'm pregnant with Adams baby."

I looked at her and kissed my teeth, i wanted to cry.

"Wow!", i said, "i wonder how that happened."
"Deena- i need to get out the endz now, if i don't they're gonna get me."
"Whos gonna get u,".

Then all of a sudden I heard the backdoor get kicked in.
I screamed.
They walked into the room, Sorcha sobbed.

"Oh shit, Deena, we didnt know you'd be here?"

"Please leave me alone,"Sorcha cried.
"U try boops us out 2 bags and fink we're lettin u get away with it."

Then Damon pulled out his strap and pulled the trigger.

54 comments:

  1. first to comment ...OMG...she's pregnant wiv adams baby ..OMG...KILL hER...lOL..SHE'S A CHEAT

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  2. Shettttt!!

    ps It's Malcolm X btw

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  3. SORCHA IS DUM, MARVIN X

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  4. Omggggg this story is so addictive keep it comin

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  5. OOH MY
    this is heated, i think were gonna be surprised at who her sister is, if theres anythin ive leartn from this from story is that nothing is at is seems

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  6. OMGGGG
    SORCHAS A BITCHHH !

    Nooo iWanted Deena and Adam to go out Again KMTTT
    Keep it goinn i wanna knoee Whatt happens next
    xxx

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  7. Who is damon again???

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  8. why are some people so DUMB! how can u forget any of the characters in this story.

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  9. There's No Need To Be Like That Ya Know...
    Not Gonna Lie I Don't Remember Who Damon Is Too For The Fact That Life Don't Revolve Around This Story
    (No Offence To The Author Who's Doing A Bangin' Job Still).
    I Think The Answer To The Question Rather Than An Insult Would Have Been The Preferred Response Ya Feel Me!

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  10. Deena should of just picked up the picture (only torn in half) and left b4 she tor out the pages in the passport!!!

    I wanna no what Ryan has done!!!

    now hurry up and put anither chapter up NOW! x

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  11. LOL @ Marvin X and Lola Monroe! This is story is too much..keep it up!

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  12. YEH I 4GOT TOO. HUZ DAMON AGAIN.....

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  13. Oh my dis is so addictive boy! Hurry up an do tha next chapter!

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  14. How can you REMEMBER all of thee charaachterss in the story whenn it's so addictivee, tht u jus forgett :]

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  15. this is soo good aww plzz make it longer. sorcha is a sket man

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  16. This writer needs to explain things as she goes on since she has 2 more chaps left.
    Now, she has to explain what sorcha and diane know that made
    Ryan set them up, she has to explain who deena's sister is and she has to explain sorcha's killing
    And why Damon was after her. She has to get Deena's test results.
    Great story but we need more clarity.

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  17. Aliieee whos damon lool

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  18. well there are a lot of characters
    it is very easy 2 forget

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  19. can som1 plz tell me who the hell damon is !!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  20. I cant remember who Damon is either...the names familiar!

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  21. WHO'S DAMON AGAIN DERE'S SOO MUCH CHARACTAS
    GD JOB 2 D AUTHOR
    DIS STORY IS BANGIN BEST IVE EVA RED

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  22. who is damon!!!!!!!!!!!

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  23. damon was one of the boys she fucked during the line up

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  24. Ahhh shit, Please dont end thisss!!

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  25. damon was in chapter 49ish to 51ish....deena went to him and murda to shot!

    also he sent diane and sorcha to that yard where diana was shot

    And i swear he was the one who fucked up Smurkz and Dee with Natalie or was it Chanel!

    PAY ATTENTION you lot...bout this isnt my life, dont you read books regarless! bet you can tell me all the recipients of Ashleys SEXTEXT scandal
    LMAO

    good chapter - boy or girl? sorcha is an ediat as is Denna and Ryan are both beautiful BOSH's!!!

    basically ryan is a gigalo!
    hehehehhe

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  26. plz tell me tht sorcha is now dead on a real i agree wiv above (to the writer) yu need to start tellin us the ova fings lyk we dnt knw hardly anyfyn yet buh yur unfoldin mre secrets not gna lie im luvin it buh hows this gna end in lyk 2 or 3 chapters unless lyk before yur gnna end this on hu deenas sista is n then start frm her tht wud b gd i personally i believe thhe sistah is chanel it wud b gd to hear were she got the money frm n all tht buh yh next chapter plz x

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  27. WHOZZ DAMON????

    and BTW Writer i wanna say congratz coz you've done a amzing job on this story. it's soo addictive that even though i started reading it soo l8 i caught up to the daily posts :/. you need to do soemthin with your skills and stop writhing all dis for 3. YOU COULD MAKKE MONEY.

    nywaiis keep it up ^^^^^ xoxo

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  28. Sorcha is the dumb one! How did she know that Deena's got a sister though?! I don't get it.

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  29. defo more clarity..............this story need to end......its getting dragged on, short chapters need to b longer. n the story was meant to be completed n finished last night wats then deal!

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  30. Omdz Shes Finnaly Dead
    PLEASE DNT END IT AT 70 IM BEGGIN YOOOOOH !

    Nd Can We Have A Great Big Orgy At Tha End ;)

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  31. OMGSSSS SHITT WOW!!
    Omgss This Chapter Is soo Guud!
    I cant Believe It!!!!!!

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  32. can some one tell me who damon is cos im not looking at the past 67 chapters to find him
    lol thanks if you do chriisss&debs + wee lurvee ur storyy! x

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  33. I CANT BELIEVE THIS STORY IS COMING 2 AN END SOON, BUT DER ARE STILL SO MANY QUESTIONS THAT NEED ANSWERING I DONT THINK DIS STORY CAN END AT 70.

    AN YHH I REMEMBER EVERY CHARECTER BUT CAN NOT SEEM TO REMEMBER WHO DAMON IS..IF ANY 1 CAN REMBER DEN GIVE ME A BRIFIN ON WHO HE IS OR IF U KNO WHAT CHAPTER HIS CHARECTER IS IN DEN LET ME KNO.

    I HOPE THEY DONT DO ANYTHING 2 DEENA..ITS TIME 4 HER 2 BE ABLE TO WALK AWAY AND NOT GET HURT 4 ONCE BUT I HOPE SORCHA DOES DIE, LIKE 4 REAL I DONT WONT HER POPIN UP AGAIN. :)

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  34. I Bet Yuu Sorcha Didn't Gett Shot, Got A Feelin Dat Dey Shot DEENA!!!! LOOOOL I Fink Dis Story Is Gonna Finish At 100 Chapters Now,,, Bare Fings Are Happenin

    Nxt Chapii Plzzz!

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  35. sorcha is a bitch!!! can deena change her fucking ways. i h8 dumb hoes man

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  36. YESSSS YOU KILLED SCORCA LIKE I ASKED!!
    THANKS!! DUMB SKET KMT!! :)
    <3

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  37. Lol I actually don't want Sorcha to die, I just think she is a good character, she makes things interesting. And after reading the Sorcha Beat I feel quite sorry for her, its easy to empathise although my life is dramatically sheltered compared to hers. And I really really hope Deena doesn't die. Or be seriously injured in any way.

    I really dislike Adam, his actions prove that he really isn't that different from the 'road men' that Deena is used to. He still slept with her, claimed that he loved her and impregnated her friend. And he still got Ryan 'set up'.

    Poor Deena, I think that she is so naive. She's actually my favourite character though, from any novel.

    Why are many people are telling the writer what to include and how to do his/her work?

    The writing however, as always is great.

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  38. There are so many chapters an characters that I did forget hu damon was....obviously the person hu sed I was dumb, doesn't have a life! No insult 2 da writer coz dis has been a gr8 story! Thanx 2 da ppl dat briefed me on hu damon was coz I aint got time 2 b searchin thru all da chapters

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  39. wowww!
    fuckkkk!
    shittt!

    2more chaps i dont want it to end :[
    i love wat deena did to sorchas passport
    she deserves it..dumb bitch

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  40. i dont want ryan to be dead :(

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  41. Click Clack BAM... Sorcha fi dead? Again?? Lol it almost ended I feel emosh! More doe pls :D

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  42. SOROCHA'S AN HER BABY MITE DIE!!!
    OMFG! THIS CHAPTER IS PEAK!!
    I PRAY DAT DEENA DONT GET SHOT! AND I HOPE DAT IF DEENA DUZ HAV HIV DAT ADAM GETS IT!

    (AUTHOR: LUVVIN THE STORRIE, BUT WERE GNNA NEED MORE THAN 70 CHAPTERS CUZ YOUR FORCE FEEDIN US MORE INFOMATION WITHOUT FINDIN OWT ANSWERS TO THE PREVIOUS ONES.)

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  43. Marvin X LOOOOOOOOOOOOOL joketing.

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  44. Sheeeetttttt Deena aint farted for ages manss!

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  45. ERM SM PPL CNT COUNT LOOL DERE WILL BE AT LEAST 3MORE CHAPTERS.. SINCE 68PART2 NEEDS TO CM OUT B4 69 N 70 DURRR !!!!
    BT PEAK AS USUAL

    YEAHH DAMON IS D WUN DAT WANTD TO WIFEY HER RIGHT.. AFTER D LINE UP AT MURDAS YARD. ND WEN DEY WENT TO INITIATE DA YUNG YOUT AFTER N DAMON KICKDED HER OUT D CAR CZ SHE DIDNT WNT NEFING ELSE TO DO WID IT? AINT DAT HIM


    MAAAAD WRITIN SKILLS AS USUAL

    LM X

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  46. "deena, deena, every1s beat it bust in her mouth duno she'd eat it"

    before this was a joke, now it suits her well

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  47. Plz Im Beggin Da Writer
    Let Sorcha Die
    I Dnt Umdastnd How Dat Bitch Has So Many Lives.

    Im Sad Dis Is Endin Soon
    I Dnt Undastnd How Ur Gunna Answer So Many Of The Unsloved Questions
    (But Im Sure U Will, U Always Do)

    And I Agree Dey Shud All Have A Big Orgy
    At The End. Lol

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  48. SORCHA "Your sister is...."
    DEENA "Who,who!".
    SORCHA "My pussy!", she smacked around the head.

    Such a classic Deena Vs Sorcha moment! LMFAO!!!
    I've truely loved reading this story...long may the skets continue their fabulous community work! LOL

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  49. I THINK SORCHA IS THE SISTER COS SHE AN IMMIGRANT, AS SHE DOESNT HAVE HER OWN PASSPORT SHE NEEDED TO STEAL DEENAS. SHE WAS PROLLY RAISED IN BARBADOS AND EMIGRATED IN LONDON

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  50. EEDIAT EEDIAT

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  51. marvin x lol....
    and i'm confused i swear deena tore up the tickets wen she was at adams yard?? and now she got them again i dnt get it!

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  52. she tore up the tickets at adams ; but still had the passports that she took to sorchas ^^

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  53. GOOD SHE FINALYY DEAD DA STUPID NASTY SLAG KMRCT

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  54. "Two words, Ryan is a bosh!".
    Sorchaa Darhlinn Dahtszz Fourr :P :)
    Yurr Sistahh Isz Mahh Pussy Madeee Mee CREASEE !! Jheeszee ! Emosshh Timesz Forr Sorchaa Buhh Truee Seyy SKETTELLE FI DEADD ! Yahh Zeet ' x

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